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July 24, 2016 at 6:57 pm #15006
I feel like the only time I start threads is when I have a problem, but I’ve got such good ideas from you that I’m asking anyway.
In a fantasy I’m working on, I have a shield. It’s not magical, exactly, but it is unbreakable and all that. Anyway, originally the theme was faith and the shield was the shield of faith, etc. But the story has changed and now the shield doesn’t mean anything and it’s not even used much…well, besides in battle, but not in a battle-changing way, if you get my meaning. I can’t take the shield out, but it needs to mean something so the first part of the book when the shield is being retrieved means something.
I want the shield to be connected to the theme of the MC. Basically, he has to learn to rely on the Prince for his strength (instead of accepting the shield and feeling like he has to do everything himself). He learns that his names/titles of king and deliverer doesn’t matter compared to the most important name of servant of the Prince.
But I’m stuck. I don’t know how to connect the shield to the theme. I’m thinking about making the shield nameless…names are very important in this culture. The MC realizes in the end that is the Prince’s Shield. It doesn’t have it’s own name because it doesn’t need one. Anyway, that’s only a partial idea and I’m wondering if any of you have any suggestions or ideas or thoughts…
INTJ - Inhumane. No-feelings. Terrible. Judgment and doom on everyone.
July 25, 2016 at 11:24 am #15040Anonymous- Rank: Wise Jester
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Maybe the shield once belonged to the MC’s father? @hope
July 26, 2016 at 7:38 am #15081@c-c-lane Well, it’s a legendary shield which has been hidden for around five centuries, so that won’t quite work. But since the characters spend the first third of the book searching for it, it needs to mean or two something…though the war won’t be won with powerful weapons, but rather by the power of the Prince.
INTJ - Inhumane. No-feelings. Terrible. Judgment and doom on everyone.
July 26, 2016 at 7:19 pm #15086I’m sorry @Hope. I’m stumped. I’ll let you know if I come up with anything… but be assured I’m not ignoring you. 😉
July 28, 2016 at 3:46 am #15125I’m afraid I’m stumped too. It’s been a while since I read it, but finding the shield was suppose to start everything, according to the prophesy at least.Does the prophecy about the shield and the spear not even exist now?
One thought, perhaps they were expecting the shield to have more power. Trusting in the shield instead of the Prince. I have no idea how that fits in with anything else, but it could be a starting point.
July 28, 2016 at 8:23 am #15128@anna-brie There’s the prophecy still, but the shield doesn’t really do anything. The shield and spear are just…there. It’s a bit of a stumper. But I think I’m starting to figure it out. Something about the shield not having any power at all; it’s more the journey connected with the shield…
INTJ - Inhumane. No-feelings. Terrible. Judgment and doom on everyone.
July 28, 2016 at 8:47 am #15129Huh, a kinda disillusionment. Maybe the prophecy about shield was cryptic and they thought it meant they would receive power from the shield, when really, it was all about the strengthening they would get through the journey.
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July 28, 2016 at 8:10 pm #15131It’s fun to twist prophecies and have them mean less, or something rather different than expected.
July 30, 2016 at 1:31 am #15154I’m guessing that your story is along the lines of a biblical analogy? The Prince being Jesus and the MC representing a Christian?
HC
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