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    Sam Kowal
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    @daughteroftheking 😀 Yes !

    You found it! 😛 That was on purpose. Stan begged me to add it in.

    *Giarstanornarak tries to melt chair*

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    Kate Flournoy
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    MNValentine
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    @sam-kowal Cool!! I like it 🙂

    Silence! Silence everyone, for the king's speech!

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    Daeus
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    @sam-kowal Good revisions. (And good synopsis in general, btw. These things are hard.)

    Possibly, these three revisions could help.

    Feastings end – feasting ends.

    Only humans farm in the city of Kurr. Dwarfs would rather win glory in the exosuit arena. When food got low in the winter of 1276, the dwarves robbed us of our crops.

    The dwarfs are better at it, but it’s either beat the dwarfs or my people starve.

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    Sam Kowal
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    @daeus 😀 Thanks. They are harder than they look

    Thanks for those revision suggestions, too. The last one especially is helpful since it highlights that the dwarves are more experienced with exosuit building, which they are but that was slightly unclear in the first version.

    *Giarstanornarak tries to melt chair*

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