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  • #41007
    Hannah
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      @catwing @dragon-snapper @emily @shannon @his-instrument @daeus @ck4always
      I have my 2nd short story live! (Capture)
      https://regeneratelifefarm.blogspot.com/2017/08/capture.html

      So after “talking” with @emily yesterday I decided to turn my story into a series of allegorical short stories (The Master’s Servants). But my question now is, should I keep linking it (Since more people like my family and friends can see it) or post the stories directly here or both?
      Blessings!

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      #41013
      Anonymous
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        @salome01w4g That is such a great story! You did a wonderful job! I think I am liking the stories as they are in 1st person, to respond to your question. Since 2nd person is hardly ever used, I think that it might be a little confusing for the reader. Also, it would make it a lot more difficult to write. Those are just my thoughts.
        I don’t think that it is a problem for you to keep linking it. But posting it would probably be fine too. Just do whatever is simpler for you.

        #41014
        Hannah
        @salome01w4g
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          @emily
          I’m sooo glad you like it!! Yeah I tried to write Capture in 2nd person and I had to re-write it like 3 times because it was way harder and wasn’t as good. I guess I just keep linking it since it is easier for me to do. Thanks for your thoughts! 😀 🙂

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          #41015
          Anonymous
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            @salome01w4g Any time.

            #41020
            Anonymous
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              Great stories @salome01w4g! I love the imagery and feeling.

              #41021
              Hannah
              @salome01w4g
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                @shannon Thank you! 🙂 Glad you like it! 😀

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                #41128
                Hannah
                @salome01w4g
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                  Story 3 is live https://regeneratelifefarm.blogspot.com/2017/08/a-walk-with-master.html

                  I feel like this one is rougher and not as good as the first two… any thoughts??


                  @catwing
                  @dragon-snapper @emily @shannon @his-instrument @daeus @ck4always @winter-rose

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                  #41146
                  Anonymous
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                    That is a good story @salome01w4g! 😀 I feel like you could maybe spend a little more time on the stories in the future and it might help. That’s just what I think, though 🙂

                    #41147
                    Hannah
                    @salome01w4g
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                      @emily yeah, my “secret” is working in a dark, very quiet room, all alone and I didn’t for this last one. Maybe trying to do one a week instead of one a day would work better. Thank you! To have an audience however small helps me work more seriously, and try to make it more interesting, deep, meaningful, etc… 🙂

                      ~I don’t know what I’m doing~

                      #41160
                      Anonymous
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                        Hmm @salome01w4g. That is interesting. Yeah, I totally get the audience thing 😉

                        #41166
                        CK4always
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                          @Hannah So sorry I wasn’t here!!! I’ve been really busy with a LOT of stuff!!! I’ll try to keep up tho 🙂

                          #41171
                          CK4always
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                            I read it…. looks cool! 😀 I enjoyed it 🙂

                            #41208
                            Hannah
                            @salome01w4g
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                              @CK4always glad ya liked it.

                              ~I don’t know what I’m doing~

                              #41211
                              CK4always
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                                @Hannah of course 🙂

                                #41247
                                Anonymous
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                                  Good story @salome01W4G! I think that maybe it would help me a little if you wrote a back story. The stories are great, but I think that a back story would help it to make more sense.

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