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    jenwriter17
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    @mariposa awesome job! 👍

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    Mariposa Aristeo
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    @jenwriter17 Thanks!

    @winter-rose I’m not sure what happened to your post…it seems to have vanished. 😕

    #59295

    Gabrielle
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    @mariposa Oh dear. Let me see if I saved it somewhere…

    Here be dragons.

    #59297

    Mariposa Aristeo
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    @winter-rose I still have your post in my email—I could copy and past it in here if you like. 🙂

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    Gabrielle
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    @mariposa  I couldn’t find it, so that would be awesome if you could. 🙂

    Here be dragons.

    #59322

    Mariposa Aristeo
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    @winter-rose Here’s your post:

    I thought you said the princess was guarded by a small dragon, not an Allosaurus!!! I didn’t prepare for this!”

    Thud thud thud. It was gaining. Curses. I looked back toward the castle. The creature was only a few hundred feet away, looming five times as tall as Cade. A slimy green colored its rough skin. The ground tremored with it’s every footfall.

    “Considering our current situation, being angry at me is a most unproductive use of your energy.” Cade kept pace beside me, shoulders relaxed, breathing easily.

    Rain pelted the ground, churning it into a formless ooze. I slipped, caught myself, and kept running. “Being angry….makes me….run faster,” I puffed.

    “You are a liar. You are slow either way.”

    “You know what, I’m…just going to trip you…and let the Allosaurus eat you. Then it…won’t matter.” A rock lodged itself in my shoe, digging into my heel. OW!

    Sheet lightning lit the sky in bursts and the clouds rumbled with thunder.

    “Then who will help you rescue the princess?”

    “I hate when you…make sense.”

    Um, I tag @that_writer_girl_99

    Challenge: Tell

    Setting: A man trying to eat an ice cream cone while being annoyed by a persistent unicorn.”

    #59325

    Mariposa Aristeo
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    @winter-rose I totally want to read the rest of this story.

    #59380

    Gabrielle
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    @mariposa Thanks for posting it! It would make an interesting story I may have to finish it 🙂

    Here be dragons.

    #59724

    Kylie
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    @inkling-for-christ This looks like fun! Let me see if I have what it takes. 🙂

    Challenge: Show

    Setting: Reading Harry Potter for the first time

    My head jerked up as I watched her plop onto the couch. She picked up the book, her shoulder’s slumping. She violently turned to the first page, clearly regretting to choose this book for school. Her eyes glazed over as she looked at the page. Then, she sat up, her eyes growing wide. She quickly skimmed that page, and turned the page, almost tearing the book in her haste. I smiled broadly. “Welcome to the obsession,” I said softly, and turned back to my own book.

    Did I do it right?

    Harry Potter forever!!!!

    #59727

    Inkling for Christ
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    @kballen, That was fantastic. Though I am no expert I’d say that was indeed well done.

    #59730

    Kylie
    @kballen
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    @inkling-for-christ Aww, shucks. Thank you 🙂

    Harry Potter forever!!!!

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