May 12, 2017 at 6:52 pm #33143
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@that_writer_girl_99 I love that chart *hugs it*. Don’t worry about mistakes! Your outline won’t be perfect.
This is just a thought, but Tam’s disappearance leads to the other guy becoming Kara’s next door neighbor, so the guy coming to the prison could be the Key event.
Or if the new guy pushes Kara to escape, then the new guy first showing up could be the inciting event and Kara’s escape into the outside world the Key event (since it’s her entrance into the adventure). Unless I’m totally wrong about all that and her escape is the first plot point.May 12, 2017 at 9:36 pm #33155
@kate-flournoy You on?
https://www.wonderingwriter.com/May 15, 2017 at 1:56 pm #33253May 16, 2017 at 12:39 pm #33285May 18, 2017 at 8:50 pm #33437
@kate-flournoy I’ll be writing for awhile, maybe we can pop onto google docs and break a few things down?
https://www.wonderingwriter.com/May 18, 2017 at 8:53 pm #33440May 20, 2017 at 1:33 pm #33503
@that_writer_girl_99 yes! Here I am! I read the chapter already and was just waiting for an opportunity to sit down and talk about it. ;P I’ve snatched a moment so here I am.
It’s really good. I read through the whole thing again and I really like where you’re going with this. The only question I have is whether or not you meant to make the guy that Kara killed sound really weird and almost supernatural. Because the way you described him almost sounded more like a creature than a human.
Ooooh… oh. Was he supposed to be a catastrophe? YIKES. *runs and hides under the bed*May 20, 2017 at 1:41 pm #33507
*grins* I can almost see your train of thought chugging along as you posted this.
Yes, the guy Kara killed is a Catastrophe–not that she and Ava know that. He’s an Earth Catastrophe, and the way he looks in my head is rather…jarring. He does look more like a monster than a human being, so there’s that.
I’ve decided that I’m officially switching my theme from Intelligence vs. Ignorance to something along the lines of Mercy vs. Revenge. I feel like this theme suits the characters better, so I’m goin for it.
Also…here we are. Sweet, shy Kara has just killed a man, and Catastrophe or not, that has serious implications. My question is…what are these implications? I have a few, but I need to tie them into the plot somehow…
https://www.wonderingwriter.com/May 20, 2017 at 1:46 pm #33511May 20, 2017 at 1:54 pm #33514
Here’s the thing–Tam was taken out of the prison for hurting a guard. She broke the prison rules and was punished for it. Kara knows that, which is why, later in chapter 4 (which is still in the planning stages) she gets confused when she isn’t punished. Her view on the Warden changes when he seemingly shows mercy to her, but didn’t to Tam.
That’s all I really have for the implications so far–I’m still trying to look inside the ripples and see which need to be written down.
But I think this state of confusion will pair nicely with Blake’s arrival inside the prison. He’s an outsider, someone who knows the truth because the Catastrophes have had a direct impact on his personal background.
https://www.wonderingwriter.com/May 20, 2017 at 1:58 pm #33515May 20, 2017 at 2:03 pm #33519
I don’t know what to say to that. I have so many questions, so much stuff that I don’t know about the plot yet, but maybe you’re right. I have to figure all that stuff out for myself.
So…no. No questions. Except–did Kara act out of character when she killed the Catastrophe? Was it too sudden? Weird?
https://www.wonderingwriter.com/May 20, 2017 at 2:07 pm #33521
@that_writer_girl_99 I’m more than happy to help. 😛 Really though, it sounds like you have it… and yes, there are some things that only you can know and questions only you can answer. This is your story after all… I’ll never understand it like you do. Just know that if you want another opinion, I’m here.
No, it was actually quite natural for Kara to do that, I thought. Considering the mental state she was in at that point.May 20, 2017 at 2:08 pm #33522
Okay, good. That’s how I intended it to be.
Thanks for all your help, Kate! @kate-flournoy
https://www.wonderingwriter.com/May 20, 2017 at 2:09 pm #33524
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