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    G. B. Carter
    @graceofspades2017
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      @shannon That’s totally alright. 🙂 No problemo!


      @f5a8c3e92
      @leumeister @dragon-snapper For you who are interested in this project, this is my character Zeb. I haven’t really perfected him yet (there’s some empty stuff and whatnot) but I thought you might like to see the gist of what I have:

      FULL NAME Zebulun Jack Greenmor

      TITLE Winged Defender, Bringer of Winds

      NICKNAME Zeb

      AGE 14

      GEMSTONE Emerald

      DATE of BIRTH May 12

      GENDER Male

      WORLD Earth

      COUNTRY United States of America

      STATE/PROVINCE Alabama

      TOWN Ashland

      OCCUPATION Average homeschooled boy by day, Bringer of Winds by night.

      SPECIES Human

      RACE White

      Skin Tone: Medium-Pale

      Blemishes: A tiny bit of freckles, barely visible.

      HEIGHT 5′ 6”

      WEIGHT 109 lbs

      HAIR

      Color: Black

      Length: 6 inches

      Style: Slightly wavy, curls around the brim of his cap.

      Facial Hair: None really; he’s still got his baby face.

      EYES

      Color: Blue

      Shape: Wide

      DESCRIPTION

      Attire: He really just likes to wear t-shirts and jeans, most of which are ripped at the knees, and tennis shoes. While these may vary, it is vary rare to find him without an old tattered Ford cap that belonged to his father, with his c-goggles resting directly atop the bill. Also, he typically keeps his umbrella close at hand.

      Overall:

      FRIENDS text

      FAMILY Salem Greenmor (Father, Deceased), Anne Greenmor (Mother), Arthur Greenmor (Brother, 2nd child), Asher Greenmor (Brother, 3rd child), Star Greenmor (Sister, 4th child, twin to Sailor), Sailor (Brother, 5th child, twin to Star), Esther (Sister, 6th child).

      ROMANTIC STATUS Single

      ROMANTIC INTEREST Nah, he’s good.

      SPOUSE Uh, no.

      CHILDREN Definitely no.

      HOBBIES Memorizing poetry, reading (mostly science), playing with his younger siblings, making up games, thinking, practicing umbrella techniques.

      SKILLS Curing boredom (for his siblings, of course), organization, giving orders, leading.

      PERSONALITY:

      MBTI text

      POSITIVE TRAITS:

      Responsible: description
      A Leader: description
      Street-smart: description
      Long-suffering: description
      Aware: description

      NEGATIVE TRAITS:

      Uptight: description
      Condescending: description
      Cynical: description
      Over-protective: description
      Overly ambitious: description

      QUIRKS Rubs forehead and tilts head down when stressed/irritated, inhales and exhales deeply as a cathartic procedure, puffs cheeks when mildly stressed, tends to stay up late, traces constellations with eyes at night, drums fingers and constantly changes position when forced to sit still for over five minutes, skips steps when ascending stairs, runs practically everywhere (not because he’s in a hurry, just cause he enjoys it), will hum songs when working hard on something, will occasionally make a pun when he’s not too busy to think, lands in a ninja-like position every time he jumps from somewhere.

      DISLIKES

      When people he doesn’t really know hugs/touches him.
      Pointless drama. Or any drama, for that matter.
      When people take themselves too seriously.
      Complainers.
      Rain. He loves thunderstorms, but just rain he finds lame.

      LIKES

      His family.
      The Bible.
      The ocean.
      Pride & Prejudice (with Keira Knightly) soundtrack (he hates the movie, but the music is nice).
      Cats.

      FEARS Ruining his family, making the wrong choice, life-or-death dilemmas.

      DREAMS To be at peace, and full, and alive, and to keep his family and friends safe.

      HISTORY

      FAVORITE MOVIE He doesn’t watch movies.

      FAVORITE SHOW No shows, either.

      FAVORITE BOOK The Hobbit (J. R. R. Tolkien)

      FAVORITE AUTHOR J. R. R. Tolkien

      FAVORITE SUBJECT Science

      FAVORITE BAND Casting Crowns

      FAVORITE SONG East to West

      FAVORITE FOOD Japanese fried rice.

      FAVORITE DESSERT Ice cream, specifically Bluebell Peppermint, sold around Christmas.

      FAVORITE DRINK Lemonade for every once in a while, water for always.

      LOVER OR FIGHTER? Fighter, but that doesn’t mean he doesn’t love certain people. He fights because he loves, really.

      NIGHT OWL OR MORNING BIRD? Night owl.

      INTROVERT OR EXTRAVERT? Introvert.

      OPTIMIST OR PESSIMIST? Borderline pessimist, though if something is undoubtedly good he’ll accept it.

      HOT-HEADED OR COLD-HEARTED? Cold-hearted.

      POP OR ROCK? Rock.

      HUGS OR KISSES? He’d rather you not touch him unless given permission, thank you.

      HEAD OR HEART? Head

      INDOORS OR OUTDOORS? Indoors, unless it’s Fall or Winter. Then definitely outdoors.

      FUN OR WORK? Work.

      BOOKS OR MOVIES? Books.

      LOUD OR QUIET? Quiet. Please.

      HOT OR COLD? Cold.

      OTHER text

      Myers-Briggs Type (MBTI 🙂 ): INTP-T

      #43207
      Leumeister
      @leumeister
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        Here’s my guy. Also, what’s the gemstone entry for?

        FULL NAME Levi Dagwood
        ALIAS (Robot Codename): UV
        TITLE N/A
        NICKNAMES Levi

        AGE Between 15 and 18
        GEMSTONE ????
        DATE of BIRTH Sometime between 1999 and 2002

        GENDER Male

        WORLD Earth
        COUNTRY – United States of America
        STATE/PROVINCE – Unknown (probably somewhere foresty)
        TOWN – Yet to be named
        OCCUPATION – Student, test subject for military remote pilot robotics experiment

        SPECIES Human
        RACE Caucasian
        Skin Tone: Lightly tanned
        Blemishes: Maybe a few freckles
        HEIGHT 166cm (short for his age)
        WEIGHT 56kg
        HAIR
        Color: Light brown
        Length: Medium
        Style: Longer at the front, with a middle part
        Facial Hair: None
        EYE
        Color: Green
        Shape: Regular
        DESCRIPTION
        Attire: Shirts (Long sleeve, short sleeve, collared), Jeans, sneakers. Doesn’t like hats.
        Overall: text

        FRIENDS Casey Dagwood
        FAMILY Casey Dagwood (brother)
        ROMANTIC STATUS single
        ROMANTIC INTEREST He has a crush on a girl he met out on mission disguised as a human (currently unnamed – may come on the team later in the series, thinking of calling her Emma Lakes)
        SPOUSE N/A
        CHILDREN N/A

        HOBBIES Pranking people of authority, video games, reading, listening to music (maybe develops a creative hobby later)
        SKILLS Ability to sneak around almost anywhere undetected. Highly intelligent. Brilliant deductive skills

        PERSONALITY:
        MBTI ENTP-A The Debator
        POSITIVE TRAITS:
        trait: Observant
        trait: Quick thinking
        trait: Flexible – can improvise
        trait: Cunning
        NEGATIVE TRAITS:
        trait: Headstrong
        trait: Ignores pain
        trait: Hot-headed – However, he’s not afraid to speak his mind and call out injustices
        trait: Deceptive
        QUIRKS Taps his foot a lot when nervous. Has a mild form of restless legs. A bit on the blunt side sometimes. Doesn’t like eating fish. Likes to quote movies

        DISLIKES
        Dislike Boarding school
        Dislike Missions longer than a few days
        Dislike The laxative powders they use to prepare them for longer missions
        Dislike Fighting with his brother
        Dislike Being talked down to
        LIKES
        Like Reading, especially fiction
        Like Some sports, like hockey and basketball
        Like Pranking People v – These are exclusive
        Like Helping people ^ two mutually
        Like 5
        FEARS Losing his brother Casey – Being taken out of the military robotics experiment
        DREAMS Creating and leading his own team of Remote Pilots

        HISTORY Levi and Casey were part of a fairly well-to-do family. They weren’t spoiled, but had a few privileges that they enjoyed.
        The only issue is that their parents traveled a lot on business, so they sent them to a boarding school for their education. Even though they traveled a lot, they still saw a lot of each other.
        However, one night when driving home from the airport, their father lost control of their car, and they died in a head-on collision with a semi-trailer. Their will stated that they were to be looked after in the boarding school until they were taken in by someone, or Levi had come of age and takes control of the money in the will.
        Levi and Casey grew very close after that. But some didn’t appreciate how close they were, because they often got into trouble, pranked the staff and some students, and were a general nuisance for the campus.
        One day, the school went on a field trip to the military base nearby. During the tour, Levi and Casey broke away from the group to explore the parts that they didn’t get to see. They managed to evade the soldiers for a little while until they got distracted by something going on in a room with partly closed shutter blinds. A higher officer caught them, and brought them back to the group, which, upon discovering they had broken away, was waiting outside, and the rest of the tour was canceled.
        Yet in spite of this, the officer who caught them figured, since they managed to get all the way back there without being caught, that they might make good test subjects for the robotics experiment. And so he and a few other people working on the experiments took them in.

        FAVORITE MOVIE Pacific Rim (after learning how similar the robotics experiment was to it)
        FAVORITE SHOW MacGyver (his dad introduced it to him when he was younger)
        FAVORITE BOOK Outbound Flight by Timothy Zahn
        FAVORITE AUTHOR Unknown
        FAVORITE SUBJECT History and Science
        FAVORITE BAND TheFatRat
        FAVORITE SONG Windfall, by TheFatRat
        FAVORITE FOOD Pizza, but likes most foods
        FAVORITE DESSERT Chocolate brownies
        FAVORITE DRINK 7-Up

        LOVER OR FIGHTER? Fighter – Once he got himself straightened out, he wants to fight for the good of the world.
        NIGHT OWL OR MORNING BIRD? A combination between the two. Can stay up fairly late, but still get up early for a teenager.
        INTROVERT OR EXTRAVERT? Extravert
        OPTIMIST OR PESSIMIST? Optimist
        HOT-HEADED OR COLD-HEARTED? Hot-headed
        POP OR ROCK? Electronic, actually.
        HUGS OR KISSES? Hugs
        HEAD OR HEART? Sometimes one, sometimes the other, sometimes both
        INDOORS OR OUTDOORS? Outdoors
        FUN OR WORK? Fun
        BOOKS OR MOVIES? He likes both, but not at the same time.
        LOUD OR QUIET? Loud.
        HOT OR COLD? Hot (why?)

        #43212
        G. B. Carter
        @graceofspades2017
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          @leumeister I love this! And the gemstone thing is literally just something fun I put in there – there’s a gem for every month. It isn’t necessary that you use it, haha. Anyway, the Hot or Cold question at the end is supposed to say which he prefers. I love your character! He’s very interesting. And is his age unknown, or are you giving me leave to choose his age?

          Myers-Briggs Type (MBTI 🙂 ): INTP-T

          #43257
          Leumeister
          @leumeister
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            @graceofspades2017

            Hey, thanks! 😀 Oh, I see. I think I knew that, but I forgot. 😛

            Oh, okay. Preference. Makes sense

            I don’t think his age is unknown, per se, but that’s the age range that I picture him in, and since the series is set in 2017, his birthday would have to be set between 1999 and 2002, if he’s going to be those ages specifically.

            Anyway, I thought of him, and after I looked up the Modern Four crossover series, I thought he’d be a pretty good fit, considering the talents and abilities and technology the characters had access to. I can endorse him in a non-canon crossover series if that works. 🙂

            #43258
            The Impossible Girl
            @f5a8c3e92
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              @daughteroftheking Glad you like her. I actually made her a bit of a fusion of a close friend of mine and a teacher I really like and see as a mentor.

              @graceofspades2017
              Yes, I am from the glorious ‘Land Down Under’! XD
              Yeah, a mentor kind of character would be fine. Well, Australia is a wonderful place.
              Um… We’re pretty similar to the US, besides the fact that our accents are more similar to Southern English and that we are far less populous. Aussies themselves tend to be fairly ‘chill’ people and as the coast (and a little inland in our Eastern states) is the only livable part of the country, many of us tend to go to the beach quite often. I’d say that Clara is from Brisbane, which is the capital city of Queensland.
              Not exactly sure what to tell you about Straya but if you have any more specific questions, I’ll be happy to answer them. 🙂

              "Not all who wander are lost."
              Wild Australian. INXJ.

              #43348
              G. B. Carter
              @graceofspades2017
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                @leumeister Feel free! I don’t mind at all. 🙂


                @f5a8c3e92
                That is so cool! And thank you – that’ll do for now. 🙂

                Myers-Briggs Type (MBTI 🙂 ): INTP-T

                #44486
                Anonymous
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                  FULL NAME Kiera Anne Haigh
                  ALIAS Princess Coral
                  TITLE Countess
                  NICKNAMES Kier by friends

                  AGE 16
                  GEMSTONE Aquamarine (fyi, I’m choosing not to associate this w/ birthstone)
                  DATE of BIRTH May 15, 2001

                  GENDER Female

                  WORLD Earth
                  COUNTRY The United States of America
                  STATE/PROVINCE California
                  TOWN Huntingdon Beach
                  OCCUPATION Student, Babysitter, Dreamer

                  SPECIES Human
                  RACE European; Caucasian
                  Skin Tone: Fair
                  Blemishes: Birthmark on upper leg
                  HEIGHT 5’ 6”
                  WEIGHT 100
                  HAIR
                  Color: Reddish Gold
                  Length: 20”
                  Style: Long, loose, and wavy
                  Facial Hair: None
                  EYE
                  Color: Gray
                  Shape: Prominent
                  DESCRIPTION
                  Attire: Tank tops, shorts in summer. Prefers anything western styled in the winter.
                  Overall: Likes to stay neat and orderly, never wears make-up

                  FRIENDS Rylee Hanover (3rd cousin twice removed, but mainly just a good friend), Jax Christian Moore
                  FAMILY Mother: Maria Father: Hubert Sister: Jana Brother: Cameron
                  ROMANTIC STATUS Umm, nope!
                  ROMANTIC INTEREST No way!
                  SPOUSE Obviously not…
                  CHILDREN Nu-uh

                  HOBBIES Singing, guitar (acoustic), jewelry making, babysitting, listening to music (all the time with her iPod), chatting with friends, and spending money
                  SKILLS Guitar, reading, editing, teasing people, singing

                  PERSONALITY:
                  MBTI ENTP
                  POSITIVE TRAITS:
                  Sees the best in others
Very truthful
                  Creative; Adaptive
Active
Independent
                  Loves to get up with the birds
NEGATIVE TRAITS:
                  Speaks before thought
Likes to be in control; micromanager
Worries about the future
Stresses about everything
QUIRKS Hates make-up, high heels, and finds it more difficult to talk to peers. Has no problem w/ adults and younger kids, slight English accent, hates dessert (all except for sorbet, creme brulee, stracciatella gelato and coffee, sweet cream, or vanilla ice cream), and candy (except for dark chocolate)

                  DISLIKES
                  Scorpions

                  Snakes

                  Satan
                  
Hot weather; unless you can go swimming
                  
Make-up, high heels

                  LIKES
                  Cool, refreshing weather
                  Wind
                  A hot cup of tea and a classic book
                  
Horses
                  Mountains and big trees
                  Singing
                  
FEARS Doesn’t want to hurt other peoples feelings, not telling the truth
                  DREAMS Wants to get married someday, have 4 kids, maybe own a dude ranch with incredible views, write hit songs, and travel the USA

                  HISTORY At the age of 9, she was adopted from an English orphanage. Had trouble adjusting to life in America at first, but made it through alright. Her adopted siblings gave her the nickname of Princess Coral because of her European heritage and her unquenchable love for the beach. As she got older, she discovered that she had special powers. She feels like she is in sync with nature. Whenever she wants, she can have the stamina of a fox, the eyesight of an owl, the hearing of a falcon, the agility of a mountain goat, the swimming power of the dolphin and the power of a horse.

                  FAVORITE MOVIE McLintock!
                  FAVORITE SHOW The Andy Griffith Show
                  FAVORITE BOOK Eight Cousins, Calico Captive, What Katy Did series, Classic books like “The Count of Monte Cristo”, “Jane Eyre”, “Pride and Prejudice”, “Ivanhoe”.
                  FAVORITE AUTHOR Louisa May Alcott, Elizabeth George Speare
                  FAVORITE SUBJECT Historical Fiction
                  FAVORITE BAND Cozi Zuelsdorff, Alan Jackson, Toby Keith
                  FAVORITE SONG Should’ve Been a Cowboy (by Toby Keith), Brave Souls (by Cozi Zuelsdorff), So Magical (by Martina McBride), Would You Go With Me (by Josh Turner)
                  FAVORITE FOOD Mangoes, Italian, and Mexican foods
                  FAVORITE DESSERT Raspberry sorbet
                  FAVORITE DRINK Ice water

                  LOVER OR FIGHTER? Fighter
                  NIGHT OWL OR MORNING BIRD? Morning Bird
                  INTROVERT OR EXTRAVERT? Extraverted; prefers smaller crowds
                  OPTIMIST OR PESSIMIST? Optimistic
                  HOT-HEADED OR COLD-HEARTED? Hot-headed
                  POP OR ROCK? Prefers country or pop
                  HUGS OR KISSES? Hugs
                  HEAD OR HEART? Head, but lets her heart get the better of her judgement sometimes
                  INDOORS OR OUTDOORS? Outdoors
                  FUN OR WORK? Both, depends on mood. Fun when she can enjoy it with friends, work when she feels bored or knows things need to be done.
                  BOOKS OR MOVIES? Both, depends on mood. Books on late nights and on rainy days, movies when tired in the evening
                  LOUD OR QUIET? Both on occasion…would prefer not to yell
                  HOT OR COLD? Prefers cold because she’s very hot natured

                  Ok, @graceofspades2017, this turned out to be an extremely crazily accurate caricature of me (except for the history, place where she lives, name, alias, facial characteristics etc.). Anyway, hope this works for you!

                  #45257
                  G. B. Carter
                  @graceofspades2017
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                    @shannon That is AWESOME! I love it! Thanks so much for your help.

                    Myers-Briggs Type (MBTI 🙂 ): INTP-T

                    #45258
                    Anonymous
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                      Happy to do it @graceofspades2017 It was lots of fun!

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