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    Hope Ann
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    So, I’ve been working on a tagline for my site, Writing in the Light. Well, it’s a tagline for me, really. Something I can put everywhere – on my blog, on my social media. Basically, something that sums up me and my writing very well. I came up with a line earlier that I really like:

    Breathing hope into the blackest night.

    It sums up what I want to do with my writing and with my life in general. Besides, let’s face it, the pun possibilities are endless. My main concern, right now, is that my publishing name and the tagline might not quite click because of the rhythm of light and night.

    Writing in the Light: breathing hope into the blackest night.

    Since everyone is brutally honest here, and since, on occasion, you even all agree, I decided to see what you thought, both about the sound of the lines together and just about the tagline in general. Like it? Hate it? No opinion at all?

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    #39809

    Josiah DeBoer
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    @hope – I think it works. Especially since it’s a tagline, the rhythm doesn’t have to be perfect.

    When I said it aloud it sounded perfectly fine, but if you are worried about the syllable count, you can shorten the tagline slightly by changing into to in. I’m not sure if you want to do that since it alters the meaning a bit, but it’s a thought.

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    Jess
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    @hope I like it. The two lines together sound fine together. But the word “breathing” is a little weird to me… I’m not really sure what’s wrong with it, it just doesn’t sound right?

    I like the tagline as opposed to no tagline. I think it fits well.

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    DaughterOfTheKing
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    @hope Brutally honest… that’s us Kapeefers. XD I think your tagline is a good one. I don’t know if this means anything, but in my head I’m reading it as “darkest night.” I like “blackest night” better, but I read it, and remembered it as “darkest.” Probably isn’t important. Forgive my rambling.

    But not without regard for the double negative!

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    Catwing
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    @hope I like it. Only thing I see that you could do is say Writing in the Light: breathing hope into the blackest of nights. Added ‘of’ Maybe???
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    #39813

    Hope Ann
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    @daughteroftheking Same here. My first thought was ‘darkest’ but then I switched to ‘blackest’ because I thought it sounded better.

    @catwing Breathing hope into the blackest of nights. I like that.

    @jess Hmmm… I like breathing. Penning could maybe work too. Penning hope in the blackest of nights. Eh… not sure. Thoughts?

    The main thing is that my family members are looking at me and thinking it sounds too dramatic. XD Though a number of taglines are dramatic, so I don’t mind. But I also have a tendency to think something is cool when it is actually more like… cheesy. XD What do you think, then? Too dramatic, or not?

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    Catwing
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    @hope Instead of ‘Breathing’ ideas…
    Drawing
    Shining
    Writing (meh.)
    Quipping (???)
    Bringing
    Coloring 🤔
    Shouting
    Living

    Maybe? Hope this helps!😉

    #39818

    Shannon
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    I personally don’t think it is too dramatic @hope. I like the word breathing in there a lot. What @catwing said about adding “of” makes it flow a lot better in my opinion.

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    #39819

    Emily
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    I love it @hope! I like your “penning” idea. It is more explicit. I don’t think that it is cheesy or too dramatic. I know you didn’t tag me, but @josiahdeboer replied…

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    #39823

    Jane Maree
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    @hope Ohh yes I do like this idea. Plus the pun just made me laugh, so PERFECT. XD

    If you wanted something just a slight bit less dramatic, you could have ‘bringing hope into the blackest night’ just because the word ‘bringing’ is a bit more…ordinary? But in the context it works perfectly well and still does have that ring to it.
    Another thought was that it’s kind of a bit long? So ‘bringing’ would shorten the ‘breathing’ and you could change the ‘into’ to just a ‘to’ maybe. That way it would grammatically still work, but it might be just that little bit less of a mouthful.
    But eh, that’s just my thoughts.

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    Hope Ann
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    @emily By all means. I want to hear your thoughts whether I tag you or not. We just have a tagging limit of 10 and I’m not on here enough to know everyone’s names… 😉

    @jane-maree Yes, the to will work, if I have the ‘of nights’ instead of just ‘night’.

    So… bringing hope to the blackest of nights

    Or

    Penning hope in the blackest of nights

    @catwing Ha. Ha. Ha. *scowls* Like I’ve not heard that and every other pun related to hope before. *coughs* Sorry. We like to indulge in a bit of dry sarcasm every now and then. Yep, we have fun with our name. XD Plus I love the meaning. *nods* It tends to be a theme in most of my stories to some extent. XD

    @shannon I still like ‘breathing’ too. Breathing hope into the blackest of nights.

    So, that’s the three so far. Preferences, guys? They all have slightly different meanings, though they all do work.

    1. Bringing hope to the blackest of nights
    2. Penning hope in the blackest of nights
    3. Breathing hope into the blackest of nights

    #39845

    DaughterOfTheKing
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    @hope Hm hm hm… *strokes chin thoughtfully* It’s a tie between 2 and 3. I’m more inclined towards 2, becouse I love how “Writing in the Light: Penning hope into the blackest of nights” sounds.

    But not without regard for the double negative!

    #39860

    Dragon Snapper
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    @hope
    I’m actually more inclined toward the first one because the second two sound really, really dramatic…like something Galadriel would whisper at the beginning of Lord of the Rings…

    *melts chair*

    #39906

    Northerner
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    @hope, I like the first one best.

    #39907

    Emily
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    @hope I agree with @daughteroftheking. I am liking number three best.

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    Title: The Perfect Grammatacallion

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