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    Daeus
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    Hi KeePers,

    What do you think about me writing a 2nd person short detective story?

    The twist is that the POV character would be both the detective and *spoiler* the criminal.

    I have no idea what the plot would be. ๐Ÿ˜›

    Am I crazy or is this actually conceivable?

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    Louise Fowler
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    @daeus It sounds really interesting. The only experience I have with second-person is Choose Your Own Adventure stories.

    Currently reading The Count of Monte Cristo

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    Aislinn Mollisong
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    I would love this! I would even attempt it myself, except, you know, NaNoWriMo.

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    Emily
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    @daeus Yikes. Second person is really hard. I personally find it a little bit tricky to understand compared to the other persons. Unlike Aislinn, I definitely wouldn’t try it myself. But then again, I’m no risk taker in the area of writing. I don’t like the idea of starting something and never finishing it. XD It must be an ESFJ thing. ๐Ÿ™‚

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    Daeus
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    @emily I’m not really worried about 2nd person being too hard. My main question is whether it would be too weird for someone to read a mystery only to find out that they are the criminal. ๐Ÿ˜‰

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    Aislinn Mollisong
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    I’ve been doing it on Aetherlight. We have this thing called “Your Life Through The Eyes Of Others” or some such. You make a little story with a theme (it’s in 2nd person), like Dystopian or Public School Kid. Then you make a poll, and the votes dictate what will happen in the next installment. Mine is called Strider’s Adventures.

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    DaughterOfTheKing
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    @daeus Hmmm. I’m intrigued. ๐Ÿ˜€ But, I seriously have no idea how that would work. I’d encourage you to give it a shot, write a snippet from it, and see if it works. (If you haven’t dome that already.) As for the POV character being the criminal, it depends what the crime was. I think I’d be disturbed if I found out “I” murdered someone, or something like that.

    But not without regard for the double negative!

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    DaughterOfTheKing
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    Dome? Really? My internal spell checker and I need to have a talk. XD

    But not without regard for the double negative!

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    Jessi Rae
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    @daeus That sounds really cool! It also sounds like something I’d write (only I’d do first or third person – probably first – just because that’s my writing preference)… ๐Ÿ™‚

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    Emily
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    @daeus Ok. That would be kind of difficult for the reader to suddenly discover, but I think that it would also be really intriguing.

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    Dekreel
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    @daeus :-O :-O That sounds like the coolest thing ever! I wonder if it’s possible to make it one of those choose-your-own-adventure stories. That would be pretty cool.

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    Ben P.
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    Wow. I think that sounds really cool! I would definitely read it if you did it. Who knows, it could be the next popular style! XD

    Avid reader, assistant robot builder, Star Wars megafan, INTJ, and computer geek.

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    katie
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    @daeus it definitely sounds like an intriguing plot to accomplish!

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    Elizabeth
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    @daeus You’re probably crazy, but knowing your capabilities, I’ve got full confidence that you can do it.

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    Josiah DeGraaf
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    I’ve never heard of a 2nd person narrative actually working. Everyone I’ve read on the subject say it’s only a gimmick and doesn’t end up doing well w/the exception of the narrow choose-your-own-adventure sub-genre. Since it’s only a short story, if you want to experiment, then by all means go for it! But I also wouldn’t personally recommend it. ๐Ÿ˜›

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