Fight Scenes 101: Writing The Fight

By Mark Kamibaya


You’ve got your fight scene all figured out. You’ve followed the five basic scene planning principles and have made sure to keep character at the forefront. Now for the hardest part: writing the fight scene.

A picture is worth a thousand words (or so the saying goes). So if a picture is worth a thousand words then how many words is a movie worth (24 frames per second and about two hours long)? Movies fightscenespost2seem to have supremacy over books especially in the area of fight scenes. Action is very much a visual journey. Would you rather read:

John turned left and punched the man with his right hand, but the man dodged the punch and returned that punch with another punch straight to John’s face.

or see it happen? Movies even have the advantage of hearing the sound of things we’ve never heard before supported by the greatest emotion mover, music. But if movies reign supreme, then why do we always hear that the book is better? There are only two advantages that books have over movies. And we need to use them to turn something visual, like action, into something experiential.

First, character connection.

The power of this is in the reader. Books can show the reader the thoughts of characters. Their internal choices and battles. Readers step into the shoes of the character and join them on a journey at the same time. This is why the book is always better than the movie. You can never be closer to someone other than yourself than with the character of your favorite book. The depth of the relationship is so close it cannot exist off the page.

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Fight Scenes 101: Planning The Fight

By Mark Kamibaya


More often than we would like, we read fight scenes. And more often than we would like, we read boring fight scenes.  Fight scenes that don’t keep us on the edge of our seat, but make us flip pages to see when it ends. So how can we make gripping fight scenes that engage and enthuse our audience? It takes both careful planning and considerate writing.  fightscenespost

Planning the Scene

A fight scene is a fight scene. Therefore, you should plan it in the same way you plan all your other scenes. So approach it using thesefive simple scene planning principles.

First, every scene needs to advance the plot.

This isn’t easy. It’s hard to cut scenes you’ve worked hard on. Some scenes are there just to show your great writing skills. Cut them. Some scenes don’t exactly advance the plot, but give great characterization moments (like showing a protagonist has awesome fighting skills). Cut it. Worst case scenario is the reader will put down your book because she’s always losing the plot. Any scene that doesn’t advance the plot needs to be cut.

Second, pace your scenes.

Two big secret reveals in a row? Hinges on melodrama. Two character deaths in a row? Too much angst. Two major fight scenes in a row? Boring. This applies to fight scenes even more because some authors (usually guys) love action so much they just stick it in at every opportunity for any excuse. “Well, I’ll put a fight scene in here because it will show that Bobby likes kittens so much he literally fights for their rights!” (Also a great characterization moment) Please, no. [Read more…]

Forgotten Aspects of Action

By Melody Faith 

Action and Adventure is a large genre of novels today. One of my favorites, in fact. A large part of these novels is, of course, action. Fist fights, gunman chases, sword duels, battle scenes: all those intense scenes that make the action a reality in the story. I have always enjoyed action in stories.Forgotten_AspectsWhen it comes to writing it, there are some pretty main points that young writers tend to forget. They are the forgotten aspects of action scenes.


Cinema Impression

That scene where you can practically see the camera angles for each scene. See the pain but also emotion in a character’s face as they swing their weapon. Hear the dramatic music ringing through the battle as a beloved character falls. Their hand moves up slowly, and you hold your breath as you await the end of an intense fight. And then you look up from your book; all is still in your bedroom, it’s late at night and your family is all asleep. Few authors do this, but those that do, create it well. James Byron Huggins, the author of a fantastic novel called Rora, is amazing at incorporating this. You feel as though you are there for every fight that Joshua encounters, defending against the enemy for your very life. So when it comes time for you to try out the cinema impression, try to slow down those scenes. If you have to choreograph the fight ahead of time, do so. View it like a story board artist: what camera angle would you focus on?


Character Development

Many times young authors like to emphasize characters in quiet scenes, rather than action scenes. They feel like they have to take a break from the story to expound on who the character is. Don’t let this happen. Action scenes are crucial for your character’s development. How do they react under pressure? How do they think when they have little time? What are the thoughts running through their head when their lives are threatened? Who would they sacrifice themselves for? Understand that your character is weak and vulnerable in action scenes: you are seeing them for who they really are. Take advantage of this; let your reader see who this character really is. Do they have a secret the reader only hears about in those intense moments that the character drops their guard?  Enjoy discovering who your character is in these moments, and drop the intense focus on what kick your character will carry out. Just dig into who this character is.



This goes hand and hand with character development and plot driving. Keep the characters talking. It helps the plot to continue driving home rather than pausing for each fight or battle scene. The best I have seen of this is Ted Dekker’s Circle Series. Thomas Hunter is a martial artist in one world and an army commander in another. In each fight scene, the plot continues to flow strongly, questions are raised, and the plot builds. You also get to know each character through the scenes, while not pausing the whole story for a flashback. When dialogue flies between the hero and antagonist, it builds so much more tension and emotion. Make your characters converse as they fight, and take advantage of these moments to flesh your character out more.



A lot of us enjoy writing the action scenes, but then when it comes to the aftermath, it’s like writer’s block strikes again. A large flaw for new writers is to skip over the aftermath. They move on to the next exciting scene, forgetting they left a character back on the last page with a broken limb and busted lip. You can’t forget the effects of the action scene. Follow through with your action. It’s not all about the fight: include the aftermath and show how it has affected your character. Bryan Davis is great at doing this in his Echoes from the Edge series. After each action scene, you are given a chance to breathe as you read about how the characters were affected. In your aftermath scenes, don’t forget to emphasize how the plot has moved or changed since it took place.


You can probably tell that when it comes to writing, developing your character and plot are the biggest points. It must all tie back to that. So even when you are writing intense action, don’t throw it in there carelessly. Take great care to why it is there. Have fun and delve into your action scenes, get to know your characters, and keep the plot flowing.


IMG_1294-3At fourteen years old I decided to pick up writing novels. I had always loved writing essays and
reports but I had never considered writing novels. I was introduced to Nanowrimo by a friend, I
decided to try it out. I never stopped writing novels since. I found a new love. A new world was opened up to me, one I could create myself. I have a firm belief in using coffee as a writing fuel. C. S. Lewis has always been my inspiration. I want to write showing messages that point to Christ and inspire others to do greater things. When I am not writing I enjoy graphic design of all varieties, listening to music, and training in Karate with my nine other siblings.


What Baby-Sitting Can Teach You About Writing

Quick. What’s your first reaction when you hear that the “littlest” members of the family are coming to spend some time at your house? For some of us, it may not be excitement. It means no computer time and an indefinite number of little kids to watch for the duration of their stay. Synonymous with the end of the world? Maybe not, but it’s not going to be a walk in the park either.

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I mean, really. Authors, the predictable species that we are, are already self-conscious enough about our writing. Hide the screen at all times—even if it’s just the innocent passerby. And one plus prying pairs of eyeballs? Yeah… there goes your last hope for finishing NaNoWriMo. Introverted? Too bad—the family is expecting you, being the responsible young adult that you are, to keep your cousins occupied.


Now what, aside from what sounds like Sarah feeling the need to tell you about her most grievous position over the holidays, does this have to do with writing? They’re little kids, after all. They can’t even read yet. Ah, but it’s not them that will be learning something. It’s you.


When my two little cousins, Charlie and Nora, arrived yesterday, the first thing we did was jump right into the action– we went to our big swing at the end of the field. Well, right after introductions.


Think about it. What kind of beginning do you want to have in a novel? Certainly not one that starts off with a bunch of boring information dumps about how life has been for the author, or all the not-so-important conversations about daily life and normal things, God forbid that we have remotely normal lives. No, you want to jump right into the action.

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If you’ve ever emailed us at KP, you’ve probably “met” Sarah—a passionate storyteller with a huge heart that loves Jesus and everyone she meets. Sarah grew up in Georgia with her mom, dad, and little sister, Merry, where she attends the University of Georgia, majoring in International Affairs and Agriculture Communication. When she graduates, Sarah wants to help people all over the world succeed in the agriculture industry and tell the all-important story of the farmer. She joined the Kingdom Pen Team as Secretary in September 2013 and now serves as the Director of Community Happiness. Sarah has been homeschooled, private-schooled, and graduated from Madison County High School in May 2015. She attended Summit in July 2015. She’ll read pretty much anything (if she had to pick, though, her favorite author would be Frank Peretti) and has tried her hand at pretty much every kind of writing out there, though she likes writing fiction and poetry best. But because writing bios is a struggle, if you really want to get to know Sarah, shove some words in her general direction via the Forum, on one of the many social medias down below, or through the KP e-mail:

Should You Include Cussing in Your Story?

“What the BLEEP!”


SONY DSCI’ve wanted to write a post for Kingdom Pen on this topic for about three years now, ever since a debate I got into on the One Year Adventure Novel writing forum. Is it okay to include cussing in your story? Or is it always wrong?

Is profanity a sin?

Of course, to determine if it is wrong to include profanity in your novel, you first have to believe that it is wrong to use profanity yourself. The Bible makes it clear that profanity is a sin (Ephesians 4:29, Ephesians 5:4, Colossians 3:8, James 3:9-12, 1st Peter 3:10, etc.)

While there are those Christians who would dispute that cussing is a sin, it is not the purpose of this article to make the case profane speech is sin. For the sake of this article, I’m going to assume we all agree that cussing is a sin.

But is it wrong for your characters to cuss?

So, swearing is wrong, but does that mean we can’t use it in our stories? After all, we display other forms of sin in our stories. Theft, murder, abusive anger, lying, jealousy, the list goes on. As we spoke about regarding the need for more strong female characters in modern literature, there is a difference between depicting something, and glorifying it. What is so different about profanity? Can we not include profanity in our stories, but simply not glorify it?

I came very close to including a cuss word in one of my novels once. I wasn’t planning on having this particular villainous character swear. I didn’t write in my outline that they would use this particular word, but as I wrote this rather intense scene between my protagonist and this villain, and as the conflict heated up, and the accusations flew, it just came to me that the villain should swear. It fit. She was the kind of character who would use a cuss word, and since I had included no profanity anywhere else in the story, the word would gain shock value.

My scene froze as I debated with myself over whether or not I should include this particular swear word, and the old discussion that I was involved in on the OYAN forum came back to me. There is a time and a place for everything, right?

Though this seemed like the time and the place to include a curse word, I eventually decided against its usage for a number of reasons, five to be exact, and I figured I should share them to help any of you who may be struggling with this dilemma in your writing.


5 Reasons not to include profanity in your story

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