Are You Helping Your Protagonist Cheat Her Way to Victory?

By Rachel Keller

You’ve written a novel that you love (ironically) beyond words and handed it to beta readers to prepare it for the final editing stage. You’ve aced all the details (characterization, plot, theme, setting). You’re sure this is the novel that will launch you into publishing. Then you receive disturbing feedback from your beta readers:

“I didn’t care about the protagonist.”Are_You_Helping_Your_Protagonist_Cheat_Her_Way_to_Victory

“The protagonist won too easily.”

“I couldn’t help feeling more drawn to the side character or villain.”

Your momentum slows as you read their comments again and again. What happened? Your character suffered greatly! She dragged herself to the end! You spent considerable time developing her story. How can they dislike her? What did you do wrong?

I had this experience on the flip side as the reader. Excited to delve into a new book, energized and intrigued by the plot. Yet, I repeatedly slammed the book down in frustration.

The Problem

In Sarah J. Maas’s Throne of Glass series, the characters, world building, plot, and climaxes were impressive, but I despised the protagonist.

Whoa, whoa, what?

At first I thought I was being ridiculously picky. The protagonist was, after all, an assassin. I wasn’t supposed to like her.

But the more I read, the more I realized that wasn’t the reason. I love flawed, realistic characters. The protagonist sometimes acted like a jerk, but that made her interesting. She fought for good (usually) and helped people. She suffered much, sacrificed much. So why couldn’t I bring myself to root for her?

Then it clicked. The author annoyed me, not the protagonist.

Maas had the power to bend the whole story to her will, and she gave her protagonist a blatant and unfair advantage. She allowed the protagonist to triumph when she would otherwise have lost because of her wonderfully flawed nature.

What’s the point of flawed characters if they don’t have to endure the repercussions of their mistakes?

Why and How You Should Avoid This Problem

Although readers yearn to see the protagonist ultimately succeed, people tend to favor the underdog. They prefer to watch the protagonist struggle to achieve her goal and earn it—not just in the literal, physical sense, but morally as well. The audience instinctively knows when a favorable outcome is merited and when it isn’t. When a character gets her comeuppance (whether positive or negative), readers cheer, and when she doesn’t, readers groan.

If you aid your protagonist in her journey, you could easily omit consequences that are necessary to satisfy readers’ moral compass of your story’s justness. Victory is meaningless if readers can’t sympathize with your protagonist.

Fortunately, this issue isn’t too difficult to fix. Below are a few tips based on my experience and a TV show that I believe handles this well: BBC’s Sherlock.

1. Be Invisible

Pull the strings like a puppet master, hidden and unseen. Don’t let the reader detect who you favor. It’s more obvious than you assume and a definite hindrance to reader engagement. If readers perceive that the protagonist is facing the world without any special advantage, they will usually side with her.

Sherlock is extremely intelligent, but also socially inept. This plays out naturally; the writers don’t seem to be manipulating the circumstances. He fends for himself, stumbling into his own pitfalls, making his own blunders, claiming his own victories. He is a strong yet imperfect character, and I like him enough to at least root for him.

2. Be Realistic

Let’s be honest, we want readers to think our protagonists are amazing. What better way to accomplish that than to orchestrate the cast of characters, scenes, and entire world to the protagonist’s benefit?

Subtly, of course.

Right.

I’ve found that this method is hard to pull off. The results are often opposite of what we had intended.

If you allow the protagonist to be herself, and you have excellent character development and plot, she’ll shine on her own. She won’t need you to be her crutch and readers won’t feel pressured to adore her.

The protagonist will fail, but she will mature through it. Then, when she reaches her goal, readers will applaud her all the louder because they witnessed the toil it took to get from A to Z.

Sherlock experiences plenty of moments when his intelligence doesn’t appear worth the cost of the disadvantages. His stories aren’t all glorious triumphs and clever dialogue. He fails. He learns. Victory tastes sweeter because it contrasts with the sting of defeat.

Don’t coddle your protagonists. Force them to work for their awesomeness.

3. Be Fair

Our books seem like perfect places to express our opinions unchallenged, but that isn’t how fiction is meant to be done. Both sides must be represented equally and granted an honest shot at winning.

The ideal your protagonist embodies must be tried. It can’t always reign supreme, or it will feel cheap and fake, as if the author is biased.

Depict more than one viewpoint impartially. Open your mind to other possibilities. Don’t abandon the truth and grab any worldview for the sake of diversity, but don’t deny a different perspective a fair chance either. Readers can sense when you’re pushing your own opinion, and it will irritate them. They won’t feel satisfied any more than they would watching a rigged contest.

In BBC’s Sherlock, John and Sherlock have opposing opinions on all sorts of matters. Neither one is always right. They teach each other throughout the show, slowly changing as they learn and develop.

They sharpen each other with their different opinions.

Application

Be careful as an author not to favor your protagonist—at least not “on screen.” You shouldn’t use your story as a staged battleground for your own opinions. Let your characters and themes stand on their own feet, without extra nudging. Otherwise, their struggle is worthless.

Don’t cause readers to wish the protagonist would fall off her high horse. The story loses weight and emotion if readers don’t care whether she wins or not—and it’s even worse if they hope she fails.

This is only one facet of creating well-developed, three-dimensional characters, but it’s a big one. If readers like your protagonist, they will forgive many other mistakes.

To succeed, take the reader’s side, not the protagonist’s.


Rachel KellerRachel is a Christian and an amateur writer who enjoys just about anything pertaining to story—beyond writing, that includes reading, digital and traditional art, photography, and watching and analyzing movies with her siblings. She feels especially inspired while it’s raining, but maybe that’s because it seldom rains where she lives. She’s written three novels and is working on a fourth, but has yet to attempt publication. Soon. =)

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  1. *screams* I LOVE SHERLOCK SO MUCH. Literally my favorite show of all time.
    This is such a great articles, right on point. I can’t tell you how many times I’ve found this to be the case. I try to avoid it in my own writing, but it’s easier said than done, isn’t it?
    I’ve been reading that newer series Red Crown, and it’s quickly becoming one of my favorite “example books” (which are those books where I say ‘you know what illustrates my point really well” and then rant about it for 20 minutes) And true to it’s definition, this series demonstrates your point very well. I’ll avoid spoiler for those who haven’t read it, but the author is rather fond of making her character lose. The main protagonist, Mare, loses basically everything. Her entire world falls apart. And it often seems like for every step forward she takes someone pushes her two steps back. She is, literally and metaphorically, fighting a war, and it’s quite amazing how it draws me in. Because I’m constantly going “how is she going to beat this one?”
    Anywho, very nicely done Rachel.

    • Thank you! I’m glad you liked it. =D
      Oooh, that series sounds like it would be refreshing to me right now, after Throne of Glass. =P I’ll look into it!

  2. Oooooh, GREAT article Rachel! I actually never thought about this. *adds it to her list of things to watch herself for in the future*

    • Haha, I hadn’t either until I read Throne of Glass and Wheel of Time! Surprised me that I could be so irritated at a book, especially one that’s so popular. Thank you!

  3. Spot on article!!! I have noticed this a few times in books I’ve read, and could never quite put my finger on what annoyed me so much! This is very well thought out advice!! Great job!

  4. Brilliant job, Rachel! You made excellent points, and your article was captivatingly well-written. 🙂 *applauds from our corner of YWW*

  5. Abby Smith says:

    Amazing article, Rachel!! Love all the points you made, thank you! 😀

  6. You have written a very thoughtful, knowledgeable and insightful critique.

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